Nice writing here and the performances aren't bad which makes your story work quite well. You successfully pulled off a romantic comedy. A nice twist of events when you reveal that she, who seemed totally uninterested in him was the one that orchestrated the whole thing. It was a fresh and unexpected moment in your script. Now just up your came with making your film a bit more cinematic. Even though Ephron tends to be flatter you can still do some interesting blocking, angles and lighting.

The chemistry between the two characters really worked well. I liked how he was very excited about everything and she was the opposite. As they say, opposites attract and I think the filmmakers made great use of that concept. I really liked them both throughout, which I didn't expect. In the end, the film has a few technical issues, but these filmmakers have talent. I can't wait to see what they make next.

There are a lot of things that really work in your film
-Nice depth of field on your side coverage
-There's a great sense of comedy yet at times you overplay it a bit. Keep it subtle and you've got something special
-your actors are really natural. Keep working with these actors but rehearse with them and you'll be amazed.
-some nice camera movement
Then there are a few things to work on.
-The audio is uneven
-Your editing could be a bit smoother.
Keep up the good work. You've got potential.

This is a fun story with a creative edge. I did not see the twist coming.

Okay, there are a few things I just loved about this project. First, the sound of her finger flicking his forehead was AWESOME! I laughed out loud. Second, the shot of them holding hands under the desk was great. And third, how she kept calling him Dork. This show is really sweet and I really enjoyed it. Some of the cinematography and focus could have been better and the editing needed some tightening. Still, I had a good laugh several times throughout.